Someone should commit me

[zyada]

For many years I've wanted to start my own BD troupe. It is now time and past time to do so; I'm running out of excuses!

So I'm going to get the cliches rolling and pimp it to the bellydancing community, but I'd like some help to make sure the ad is complete. I haven't actually set up a space yet, but here is what I will be posting to get new dancers:




I want to create a new troupe called Arafeet. Arafeet is the plural form of Ifrit - a type of magical creature like a djinn. While some say that the Ifrit were evil, in truth, they were fire spirits who did not want to conform to the dictates of mere mortals.

Arafeet will be a group of dancers who can create magic with their performance. Our dance should set the stage on fire and challenge the audience's expectations of belly dance.

I envision this troupe to be cabaret/gypsy/modern/eclectic fusion - a very non-traditional style! Emphasis will be on performance, expression, and adaptability. While there will certainly be troupe routines, I will also expect troupe members to be willing to perform solos. Choreography will be at the intermediate/advanced skill level.


On ??? I will have an open house at the Bedford Boys Ranch for any dancers who are interested in joining my troupe. If you are looking for a new dance experience, please join me.

Do I need to add anything besides actual info on when this is?

Comments

[alyxyn.livejournal.com]

Oo! I get to get out the red pen! err, font. Something.

I like this take on it. Writerly nitpicks:

• take out the comma after "Our dance should set the stage on fire"
• insert a comma after expression in "expression and adapatability" (I love practising conservation of commas!)
• I think you could end the sentece at "please join me." You've already mentioned creating the troupe.

[zyada.livejournal.com]

Done. Anything else?